For the most part, they're looking pretty good! I might make a few changes:

1. インドは三つのきせつがあります。Might as well be specific with みつ, いろいろ sounds very vague.. それらはなつとつゆとふゆです。ら on それ is a pluralizer.

3. すべてはみどりになります。は here is better.

4. そして、ふゆには、てんきがさむいです。Add a conjunction, そして、and use に for ふゆ. I also added は to ふゆに because that makes it comparative - you're comparing the seasons. (Alternatively, ふゆのてんきは）.

5. でも、つゆがいちがんすきです。You don't need the わたしの. If you really wanted to put that in, it'd be でも、つゆがいちばんすきなきせつです。 If you use わたしの, it has to modify a noun (すき is a な adj), so I put　きせつ at the end).

Sorry for late reply, hope that helps.

Snowman
Answered 6 years ago